请高手点评一下我这篇英语作文

我按顺序说吧
第一句就有语法错误many universities entitle the students to DO the teaching evaluation 即使改了也觉得第一句不怎地，There are some factors contribute to diong teaching evaluation.这句有些别扭直接some factors contribute to this phenomenon. 这句universities could get some teaching information from the evauation which is done by students去掉which is ,下一句中according to 改成depend on
这句是什么such as their teaching quality, their professional knowledge, their teaching methods and their characteristic judged by students. Good or bad,not good or not bad, teachers could improve themselves太乱了，下一句more easier低级错误much easier

On the one hand, school, student and teacher could benefit from it.On the other hand, a lot of more people could be more positive to make work out better and better.这句很差，还有语法错误
a lot of more people could be more positive to make work out better and better改成a lot of people could be more positive to do their job(to work)
总评：如果是四级只能得5分，还要遇到好老师，我过了六级的，但英语水平也一般，不过作文看过很多，点评也是，在说也知道四六级评分标准
本篇整体思想不是很明确，语法错误很多，在追求用复杂句子的时候错误百出，但连接词用的还可以，注意句式的变换和语义的连贯与逻辑

Nowadays, many universities entitle students to teaching evaluation, which has aroused common concern. What impresses me most is that this new policy is becoming more and more welcome. so I’d love to explore the factors that contribute to making teaching evaluation.

First of all, universities can obtain honest and objective teaching information from the evaluation done by students, so that the teachers can make improvements according to the outcome. Second, teachers can learn from the results of teaching evaluations produced by students, including their teaching quality, their professional knowledge, their approaches employed and their teaching styles. Whatever the evaluation results are, teachers can understand further their strengths and weakness. Furthermore, students can have the valuable opportunities to get their voices heard.

As far as I am concerned, I am in favor of teaching evaluation in our school. Not only can teacher also improve their work, but also students can enjoy better education.

1 你在Word中输入，就可以发现原文的语法错误
2 用我不够的英文水平简陋地说一下
1）我不知道四级要求如何，但此文水平，就我经历，是高中左右。
2）很多单词的用法需要品味才可以发现微妙的差别，比如what’s more就略显口语化。
3）on the one/other hand 表现的是对比关系，我建议用in addition, moreover, furthermore等
4）原文最后一句Not only…better. 不懂
…暂且如此

先改语法。

第一段，最后一句，contribute--contibuting,修饰factors，因为前面已经有一个谓语动词了。

第二段，第三行，the results.such as后面的名词性短语跟前面learn不搭配，改成：such as how about their teaching quality,professional knowledge, teaching methods and characteristics are judged by the students.这样好点。
第五行，有点啰嗦了那句。whatever good or bad, the teachers....
最后一行，把more去掉。

第三段。第一句，evaluation前面加个the,
第二句，On one hand,还有，名词前最好有冠词。要不就用复数。The school, students and teachers.
最后一句，more and more people could work more positively.
Nowadays, many universities entitle students to teaching evaluation, which has aroused common concern. What impresses me most is that this new policy is becoming more and more welcome. so I’d love to explore the factors that contribute to making teaching evaluation.

First of all, universities can obtain honest and objective teaching information from the evaluation done by students, so that the teachers can make improvements according to the outcome. Second, teachers can learn from the results of teaching evaluations produced by students, including their teaching quality, their professional knowledge, their approaches employed and their teaching styles. Whatever the evaluation results are, teachers can understand further their strengths and weakness. Furthermore, students can have the valuable opportunities to get their voices heard.

As far as I am concerned, I am in favor of teaching evaluation in our school. Not only can teacher also improve their work, but also students can enjoy better education.

你在Word中输入，就可以发现原文的语法错误

先改语法。

第一段，最后一句，contribute--contibuting,修饰factors，因为前面已经有一个谓语动词了。

第二段，第三行，the results.such as后面的名词性短语跟前面learn不搭配，改成：such as how about their teaching quality,professional knowledge, teaching methods and characteristics are judged by the students.这样好点。
第五行，有点啰嗦了那句。whatever good or bad, the teachers....
最后一行，把more去掉。

第三段。第一句，evaluation前面加个the,
第二句，On one hand,还有，名词前最好有冠词。要不就用复数。The school, students and teachers.
最后一句，more and more people could work more positively.

语法改完了。。。
其实考试老师看不了这么细的。所以头跟尾一定要写好，一定不要有语法错误。你这样开头结尾都是病句的话，印象分就没了，这篇文章肯定不及格。认真点就好了。

好难