大神帮我看看这些句子有哪些语法错误，句子通不通顺

Dear Fang, I understand that you are in a dilemma. Although so many graduates are eager to set 【foot 】on their work-life road, there are still some who prefer to start their new life after gaining another degree to make better 【preparations】 for entering society. In my opinion, the latter are more admirable. You are good at all your 【courses】 these years, so if you do like to spend another two or three years on campus, you should stick to it. In today's society, the 【achievements】 and status you can get and the devotion you can make are no doubt in proportion to your educational background and degrees, coupled with the efforts you put in them. If you want to stride to your destinations more smoothly and easily, why not head for the further study courageously? Whichever you choose, I firmly believe your industry will ensure your success. After all, it is you who have the 【final】 say on the final choice. Best wishes, Yours sincerely 这是网上的文章，到处都是你的原版，但真的有错。