一、(2009全国卷I、海南、宁夏卷)
假定你是李华,正在英国接受英语培训,住在一户英国人家里。今天你的房东Mrs Wilson 不在家,你准备外出,请给Mrs Wilson 写一留言条,内容包括:
1.外出购物
2.替房东还书
3.Tracy 来电话留言:1)咖啡屋(Bolton Coffee)见面取消
2)此事已告知Susan
3) 尽快回电
注意:1. 词数100左右;
2.可以适源岩当增加细节,以使行文连贯。
Mrs Wilson,
___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Li Hua
【参考范文】
Mrs Wilson,
I’m going out shopping, and won’t be back until about 5:00 pm. I have taken with me the two books you asked me to return to the City Library. At about 1 o’clock this afternoon, Tracy called, saying that she couldn’t meet you at Bolton Coffee tomorrow morning as she has something important to attend to. She felt very sorry about that, but said that you could set some other time for the meeting. She wanted you to call her back as soon as you are home. She has already told Susan about this change.
Li Hua
【解析】
作文题仍然同去年一样,属于提纲式要点作文,要求学生就所给内容写一张留言条,是学生比较雹乎御熟悉的题材,体现了英语学习应该注意实用性,生活型的原则。应顷帆注意下面几点:1)注意人称,应该用第一人称的形式给房东(第二人称)写便条;2)注意时态的正确使用:从试题的内容上可以看出在表达要点1和2时应用将来时;而要点3中的几个方面则需要注意时态的替换,会用到一般过去时,现在时和将来时。3)注意恰当使用逻辑词语,是各个要点间逻辑连贯,行文通顺。提纲类书面表达不是简单的逐条翻译,而是将所给的几个要点合理的组成比较通顺的语句,因此要仔细组织语言,合理安排结构。在语言方面,要特别注意简洁明了,开头要开门见山。
【专家简评】
依然保持全国卷I短文写作的老套路:人物李华(自1999年以来,中间除了02年,统统都是李华同学在写信,历时十年,众多效尤者),话题为简单的外语外事活动,形式为写信(邮件或留言),实则依然是短文写作,控制程度较高,体裁以陈述说明为主。
二、(2009.全国卷II)
假定你是李华,你的美国朋友Sarah 打算暑期来北京旅游,来信询问改建后前门大街的情况。请你写封回信,简单介绍以下内容:
1. 简况:长800余米、600多年历史、300余家商铺;
2. 位置:天安门广场南面;
3. 交通:公共汽车17、69、59等路,地铁2号线;
4. 特色:步行街、当当车、茶馆、剧院等。
参考词汇:步行街 pedestrian street
当当车 trolley car
地铁 subway
注意:
1. 词数100左右;
2. 可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯;
3. 开头语已为你写好,请将完整的回信书写在答题卡上。
Dear Sarah.
Thank you for your letter asking about the rebuilt Qianmen street. Here is something about it.
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【参考范文】
Dear Sarah,
Thank you for your letter for asking about the rebuilt Qianmen Street. Here is something about it.
Qianmen Street is a famous street of over 600 years old. Along this 800-meter street, there are more than 300 shops. As the street is in the center of Beijing, just to the south of Tian’anmen Square, it’s very convenient to get there by bus. You may take Buses No. 17, 69 or 59. Subway Line 2 has a stop there too. Qianmen Street is a pedestrian street, but there are trolley cars to take you not only to the shops, but also to chatters and teahouses where you can experience a truly Chinese way of life. I’m sure you‘ll like it.
【解析】
本文是书信格式,给出四个要点,属于常规文体,学生只要把四个要点写全,注意上下文,句与句之间的合理过渡即可。
【专家简评】
人物李华,简单的外事活动。体裁属于陈述说明性质。话题是介绍前门大街改建情况。但这个话题对全国卷II考区的考生多少有些歧视。这种歧视可以理解为城乡歧视和信息歧视。因为该考区学生对前门并不熟悉,所幸试题控制很严,只当是翻译了。另外,试题所提供的名词类词汇缺乏考试的实际意义,只是照抄而已,对考生并无挑战。
三、(2009.北京卷)
第一节, 情景作文(20分)
假设你是红星中学高三一班的学生李华,为响应绿化祖国的号召,你班四月十二日去郊区植树,请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序,介绍植树活动的全过程,给某英文杂志的“绿色行动”专栏写一篇以“Green Action in Our Class”为题的英文稿件。
注意:词数不少于60
提示词:郊区 suburbs
第二节 开放作文(15分)
请根据下面提示,写一篇短文,词数不少于50
In your spoken English class, your teacher shows you the following picture. You are asked to describe the picture and explain how you understand it.
第一节 情景作文(20分)
一、 内容要点:
1、 骑车去植树
2、 植树
3、 安插提示牌
4、 照相
二、说明:
内容要点可用不同方式表达
【参考范文】
Green Action in Our Class
April 12 is memorable because our class had a meaningful experience on that day. In the morning, we bicycled to the suburbs to plant trees, talking and laughing all the way. Upon arrival, we began to work immediately. Some were digging holes. Some were carrying and planting young trees. Others were watering them. After getting the work done, we put up a board reminding people to protect the trees. Before leaving we took some photos to record our green action. Seeing the lines of trees, we all had a sense of achievement. We feel it’s our duty to protect and beautify our environment.
【解析】
本文是设计巧妙的提纲要点式作文,与环保结合,立意较好。题材贴近学生实际,学生只要注意理清思路按照活动的内容和时间来写即可。
【专家简评】
在全国卷和地方卷中,08年只有北京卷是记叙文,09年又是记叙文。有趣的是,都是“红星中学高三一班的学生李华”。场景设置几无二致,形式更是何其相似乃尔。如果追索源头的话,全国卷NMET时代的连环画看图说故事便是始作俑者了。NMET1998年书面表达题跟北京卷有得一比。四格或六格连环画的形式,多少让人回到了九十年代。一个是红星农场,一个却是红星中学。就话题而言,08北京是春游活动,09北京是植树主题,而NMET1998则是参观活动主题,话题显然高度相关。
第二节 开放作文(15分)
【参考范文】
What an interesting picture! A Western young man, sitting at a table, is ready to eat a bowl of noodles. He is holding two forks the same way as we Chinese hold chopsticks. He is trying so hard to pick up the noodles that he is sweating a lot. At first glance, I think it’s a bit funny, for we Chinese take for granted that chopsticks are the tools for eating noodles. The man in the picture is trying to copy us. Obviously he is doing it the hard way. Maybe using one fork will do a better job, In my opinion, we don’t need to copy others’ ways of thinking. Sometimes a simpler way of doing things may be a better way.
【解析】
本文是开放性作文,要求考生把握好图画内容,发散表达。考生重点要看出这个人是卷发高鼻的外国人,要体会到西式刀叉对中式食物的矛盾性。
【专家简评】
北京卷每年的第二篇作文(开放作文)一直都比较新颖,也能引人思考,问题是往往那个思考的关键点(文眼),学生未必能抓住或说未必能清楚地表达出来,尤其是要达到一语破的之妙,在高考那种氛围中,似乎不易。In my opinion, we don’t need to copy others’ ways of thinking. Sometimes a simpler way of doing things may be a better way. 这样的灵智多么需要现场的急智啊!如何让自己的思想收缩在几个简单的句子结构里面,这本身就是智慧。
北京卷的短文写作基本形成了自己的风格。近几年一直比较稳定。而2010年的北京随着课改的深入,高考应该会发生一些变化。